2016高考英语满分作文全汇总及名师点评_欧阳修论作文

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注意:1. 词数100左右;2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

Mrs. Wilson,

I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.

Yours,

Li Hua

【名师点评】

本文属于提纲式要点作文,是学生比较熟悉的题材,体现了英语学习应该注意实用性,生活型的原则。行文人称、时态运用恰当、准确,各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译,而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句,因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方面,要特别注意简洁明了,开头要开门见山。

2016高考英语满分作文全汇总及名师点评_欧阳修论作文

【试题回放】

情景作文:假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为响应绿化祖国的号召,你班四月十二日去郊区植树,请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,介绍植树活动的全过程,给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。

注意:词数不少于60 提示词:郊区suburbs

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April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.

【名师点评】

本文是设计巧妙的提纲要点式作文,与环保结合,立意较好。文章思路清晰,要点连贯,在语言的表达上选词新颖,同时运用了分词短语作状语等较好的句式表达。

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Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.

The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.

We were tired but happy.

【名师点评】

本情景作文的内容要点如下:1.讨论;2.爬山;3.检拾别人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。

内容要点可用不同方式表达。本文覆盖了所有内容要点,较好地完成了试题规定的任务。其中,写作主题突出,详略得当,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇,而且有效的使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文机构紧凑。本文叙述清楚,描写细致,准确运用了很多富有表现力的词和句型,例如:“set off early”,“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等,将活动的情形很形象地描述了出来。

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好词:

1 set off 出发2. litter n.废弃物3.respectively adv.分别地

好句:

1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .

在爬山时,我们享受着温暖的阳光和美丽的风景。

2. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.

然而,当我们登上山顶,被眼前的一幕惊呆了:瓶子和香蕉皮这样的废弃物到处都是。

评析:细节描写,生动形象。“shock”一词也用得生动传神。

2016高考英语满分作文全汇总及名师点评_欧阳修论作文

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【试题回放】

鼠标是计算机时代最佳的人机交互工具之一。它极大地方便了人们的计算机操作。但是,过分依赖鼠标的习惯也会带来一些不利影响。请你以鼠标为切入点,根据下表所提示的信息,用英语写一篇短文。

鼠标的必要性对多数人来说,操作计算机,上网冲浪……

鼠标的便捷性点击、移动、插入、拷贝、删除……编辑文本,搜索信息……

收发邮件,选购商品……

点播音乐,下载电影……

如果过分依赖鼠标…… (请考生结合自身感受,列举两到三点)